A Conversation for Tifton, Georgia, USA
just a little polish
oht3lv Started conversation Feb 4, 2006
This is a good informative article. The second section, "And what's there to see?" needs a little polishing.
"As mentioned" means you're about to say something you've already said. I suggest eliminating the repetition.
"Another small money maker"-- since you didn't use the phrase "small money maker" previously, "Another" can be dropped.
"Along with the Agirama"-- I would delete repetitive references to (how is it spelled?) Agrirama. Once is enough in such a short article.
I have traveled down I75 and found this article interesting. Thanks
just a little polish
U168592 Posted Feb 4, 2006
Thank you very much 
I've altered the Entry to make it read better now, thanks! Glad you liked it 
MJ
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