h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Hi, bit of advice needed here folks....re. listing of generic drugs as indicated by DrMatt. I'm not sure where to put the list or would it be better to put the generic name in brackets alongside the sub headers for each explanantion of the medicines?
I did do a bulleted list before and after the medicines section, just felt it did'nt look right.

(those who know me know I can have these thick moments, I blame me meds!)

As for the idiosyncratic punctuation and phrasing.......I'll again await further advice/comment!!

*Wonder if I can get treatment for that?*

Regards
ST

Hi Straighttalker, nice entry

You have used capitals for heart, heart attack and heart disease in various places but these are not proper nouns so don't need to be capitalised. I think the same is true for angina.

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Still reading it

Most common cause's should be most common cause.

And yes, I think the natural place for each drug would be by the sub-heading, Beta Blockers (e.g./such as/ metoprolol).

Jabs

Ok, so here's what I've got so far :

It effects arteries throughtout the.. - throughout

Unstable Angina is potentialy dangerous as - potentially

The most common cause's of narrowing of the arteries to the heart is excess fatty deposits - causes, and shouldn't it bbe 'are',plural ?

to get heart disease first then go on to - I'd suggest to say : ... first and then...

of not being to exercise properly hence - not being able to...

If after surviving a heart attack tests will be carried out to determine the cause. - either : If you survive...or 'After surviving...

fortunate and get warnings before hand - beforehand

symptons - symptoms

The electrodes pick up blood flow activity and heart activity and produces a print out - produce a printout

Troponin is released into the blood stream and are measured up - and is measured up

are relative safe and routine - relatively safe ?

and whats likely to be available - what's

Medicines and How They work. - Medicines and how they work ?

They are very effective in preventing Angina but work to slowly in relieving an attack. - angina, too slowly/ work to slowly relieve an attack ?

reducing the risk of further heart attack - a further heart attack/further heart attacks


Not yet finished, but getting too tired to go on for now.

wow

That was really terrific Bel *waves*

Jabs

Thanks Jabbs, but it took me hours to get so far

Ouch, cheers B, told you, keyboardyitis!!!
Amendments done! I will wait for rest...

Jabs...cheers done your bit too!

Will list the drugs and see what happens!

Wow, that was fast ST. Will try to go through the rest tomorrow, in case nobody else does.

Oh, and before I forget : have a look here :
http://www.bbc.co.uk/dna/h2g2/brunel/SubEditors-Style

( Have a look at the 'Italics' section )

Italics....thought you meant the dreaded beeb type folk....

ahem...done...I think!

I'll have a look when I'm more alert, too tired now

I was asked today what 'Unstable Angina' meant!! As a result, I have put a brief explanation in the description at start of article defining unstable angina.

ST.

Good mornning, the system seems to be working again, so here are a few more things i found :
You might want to link to a few entries :
usually refers to the furring up of arteries -

diabetes

exercise

diet

some other things:

Nitrates relax the muscles in the walls of veins and arteries - are there muscles in the veins ?

they relax the walls of the arteris - arteries

These have a similar effect to nitrates as they relax the walls of the arteris and so improves -improve

they stop blood clotting it means you can bleed for longer. - which means

the diagnostic test the angiogram - during the angiogram

minimum stay in hospital of up to a week. - of at least a week ?


The electrodes pick up blood flow activity and heart activity and produces a printout showing the trace patterns - the electrodes ...produce

As for the punctuation, you'd better wait for a sub to turn up

Under 'Nitrates you give the example of 'isosorbide mononitrate' in brackets. However, the text doesn't mention this at all. Perhaps the ISM should be replaced with GTN - (especially as GTNB is the one most people asre familiar with?

Hi,

I like the way you've done the drugs now, ST. Just one little quibble - wouldn't it be better to have the e.g. and brackets in straight script so that the drug name is more properly in italics?

Jabs

It effects arteries throughout the body.> affects

Cardio-vascular disease effects arteries throughout the body > affects

This sentence is confusing:

'There is a misconception that the heart gets it's oxygen from the blood within the heart when in actual fact it gets the oxygen from blood flow to the heart and coronary arteries from the outside'.


Suggest something like: There is a common misconception that the heart gets it's oxygen from the blood within the heart when in actual fact heart muscle receives its own supply. Thus blood leaving the heart is pumped by the left venticle into the ascending aorta, thence to the rght and left coronary arteries which supply the heart muscle itself. This is called the 'coronary circulation'.

'ldl cholesterol which is the bad cholesterol...

This needs explaining, perhaps in a footnote. LDL means 'low density lipoprotein' (as opposed to the other form, HDL = high density lipoprotein'. As far as I'm aware, these initials are usually written in upper case