h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: The Wedding Day - A4870938
Author: Flameisgold - U1652413

Everyone dreams of a perfect wedding day.

Workshopping and reading only. Would appreciate comments or advice etc.

Hello, Flame.

I am sorry not to be either constructive or critical, but I have just read The Wedding Day and thoroughly enjoyed it !

All along I thought Amanda was the bride and that Mark was going to jilt her;or dad was going to have a heart attack - his tight collar !!

Thank you very much for sharing this.

C

Very good! I loved it! You used the ambiguous nature of 'she' and 'her' very well, and I never even guessed the ending before I got there

Thank you both for your comments. Glad you enjoyed this story.

Flame

Will be on the look out for more !!

This is beautifully written; both in terms of the English, its style of expression in perfect, easily read prose, and in its subject-matter as a lovely, if ultimately sad story.

A few small errors to clear up. We all get something wrong, me more than most!

cousin (delete the final 's')

Would read better as '...seat next to her'.

'suddenly' appears twice in same sentence.

But this is an excellent Entry for AWW in my humble opinion.

Let's have some more writing from you... please!

f.

Well thank you I'll take a look at the errors, thanks for pointing them out, very useful. Another story is coming very soon....so do come back and read more.

Cheers,

Flame