h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: my disordered body - A4296882
Author: brightMessyJessie - U1652893

Tell me what you think...

Thanks for telling us about this. I found it very interesting, however there are definitely things you could bring into the entry to make it even better.

How does ITP affect your daily life now?

"This streak continues today. I am rarely sick enough to miss work, church, or chores...underneath I still harbor the occaisional irrational fear of unexplained symptoms."
You talk in the present tense through all of this paragraph...surely that can't continue today because you do now have something identifiable wrong with you?

"They explained that it referred to someone who pretended they were sick all the time."
This needs to be present tense, as the word still means this

Thanks for sharing this
Kat

hmmm, thank you.

As I wrote it I tried to catch and unify my tenses. I have been ruined by sloppy online journaling!

Also, I will see about including the daily life part you suggested.

Something else I want to avoid: writing in passive voice. Again, thanks for the feedback!

I was able to relate to this on a couple of levels and found it's honest, straight forward approach to be the right one for sharing something such as this.

Strange how credible hypochodria is as an illness when it can be the cause of such side effects as addiction to painkillers. Someone close to me suffered from all kinds of 'maladies' and was prescribed Demerol and Percocet like they where asprin. Years of unintentional abuse were the result, though we all suffered because of it.

And as to dealing with the incurable, I'm of the opinion that one is always better served knowing than living in ignorance, with fear and denial as constant companions. It says a lot about your personal character that you can look not just to yourself but also consider the implications it could pose for a child as well. It's wisdom and maturity personified and I applaud you for it.

Now as to improving the piece itself, kat knows whence she speaks so it's advice well headed. Might as well get used to taking the 'slop' out as we expect to read a whole lot from you here in the future .

Spynxxx

thank you, and I am glad you can relate.

It's all fun and games til someone loses an eye. Thinking you're sick becomes a lot less interesting when you actually are sick...

By the way, I made a few revisions to the first entry. They were certainly not sweeping, but I think I fixed at least the problems Kat pointed out.

Any further suggestion is appreciated. Thank you. You can bet there's a lot more hot air where this came from. Since I usually have a lot to say, I'll probably also have a lot to write. I will try not to ramble on about nothing for more than 65% of the time.