h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: modern etiquette - A1022527
Author: Jane Austin - U220470

I hope this is the write place for this!!

Yep.
Interesting punctuation technique, commas instead of apostrophes.

The spoken quotations should be indented separately and given their own line, instead of incorporated into a paragraph.
It makes conversations scan more easily and the page look more formatted.

Good effort!

still can,t find all the bits on this computer, I,ve only had it 5 years and it was a long time ago since I went to school!! but, thanks for your advice!!!

Jane

Your keyboard is missing something?

I am a bit of a techno-lump myself.

I barely understand the parts of the computer that resemble a typewriter.

Oops, I forgot. It is difficult to indent on this site.
Ahh, forget that part.

Just use the "enter" button to separate the quotes from the others.
The apostrophe button should be right next to the "enter" button, under the " sign.

Ohh, how of me, I wondered what those little marks were next to enter now I know, have a on me!!

Jane

Hmm, I see you found the smiley page readily enough!

How much is that moggie in the window?

aren,t they just these things??? so expressive and I just them!!!

Would you like that then??? I am going to have one!!!


Jane

Enjoy yourself.
I've cut back quite a bit on the because I'm trying to quit smoking and the two seem to go hand in hand with me.

Good luck with quitting the dreaded weed, you are quite right a nice and ciggie go hand in hand! I should know!!

Jane

Hmm. I'd advise against 'correcting' the format. I had no problem with understanding. If there were long sections of dialogue I would agree but as it is there's just the odd line of speech and I like that they are naturalised into the text.

I don't like the last paragraph. Sorry.

Up to there I think it flows well and has a nice chatty style. But the last paragraph is distinctly moralising and in an entirely different register. I think the bulk of the piece makes the point and the last paragraph is overspelling it.

That's just my and I did enjoy reading it and I agree with the points made.

So thanks

Hello Nadia

Thanks so much for your comments, actually I haven,t visited H2g2 for ages, and had actually forgotten that I had even written this, so I was really pleased to find your posting when I visited tonight!!

Best wishes
Jane

You're welcome. I'm glad you came back.

N