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A901315 - FRAGMENTED (part V)
a girl called Ben Posted Feb 7, 2003
Hi Diskworld's Pythonist!
Thanks for putting this into AWW - I enjoyed reading it, and the other entries in the series.
(In order they are:
A815384
A817526
A820658
A876233 and
A901315 (this one)).
I rather like these - you have a deft way with puns, and I like puns.
What do you want to get from AWW?
I assume that you know that because these are fiction (or so I devoutly hope!) they are not suitable for the Edited Guide.
If you want some detailed commentary, I am happy to make a few remarks about each of them.
My overall feeling is that you have a way with words, a nice eye and a sense of humour, but that these are rather unpolished. Some of the sentances are awkward. You may find that reading a piece of writing out loud helps you identify which sentances work and which ones are more clunky.
I was also uncertain whether or not I was reading a single story in 5 parts, or 5 separate stories. I assume it is one story, but I found the breaks between some of them quite substantial.
Anyway - 
for writing them and 
for posting them here. As I said, I enjoyed reading them, they kept my attention (most of the time 
, and you can turn a pun. I will do outragious things for a good pun.
And keep on writing - the more you write the better you will get.
Ben
A901315 - FRAGMENTED (part V)
a girl called Ben Posted Feb 7, 2003
Damn! I *do* know how to spell 'Discworld' - I just keep forgetting!
B
A901315 - FRAGMENTED (part V)
[...] Posted Apr 14, 2003
Err am I getting complements or citique here?? !
Just wondering.. what could I get for this in AWW?
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