h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

An interesting entry... I have a couple of suggestions:

Sort out the paragraphs so that they're spaced out; this'll make it look a lot less cluttered. You need to use and instead of , I believe.

See if you can find any relevant material on the internet... historical essays on the subject of nursing, that kind of thing. A few hyperlinks'll liven things up a lot.

Look for articles in the guide to link to - such as the one on donating bone marrow, and the one about donating blood - anything which mentions nurses.

The use of quotes indicates quite clearly that you don't agree with sexist attitudes to nursing; but it'd be nice to have this stated explicitly. Remember, though, that phrases such as 'I don't agree with' don't work very well... something along the lines of 'In these englightened days, it is widely recognised that...' will work a lot better.

Whilst we're on the subject of quotes, use ' instead of " - it looks a lot neater.

Here's hoping it gets accepted...

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Thanks for your useful suggestions - I'll update in a few days, (I have a queue as well )

Thanks for earlier advice; I've finally found the time to update my entry - I've added links, used more paras and, I hope, made some suggestions more explicit.