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Entry: Free Verse - A1094023
Author: Lee - U168807

I liked it.

Jeeze Lee this is GOOD! Thank you very much for posting it here. I like the simplicity of the language, it has a subtle rhythm, and it works really well.

You convey the sense of isolation really well, almost a sense of being invisible. The people in the poem talk about the carpet and the stain, not about you. I've also sat alone in the dark, spilling words onto a page, so it resonated very strongly for me. It is also full of sounds, which makes the few visual images even more shocking.

Well done.

It always pleases me when writers post poetry here, though most of the people who reply tend to be shy of commenting.

I hope other researchers read it and admire it as much as I do, and I hope it does well here in the AWW.

Thanks again for posting it.

Ben

Very good! I am shy of commenting on poetry because I always think I might be missing something

I got a lot of good imagery as well. Maybe not the subtle stuff

Thank you! I hope you continue to write poetry and submit it

Liked it too. What stuck me most was the rhythm and the pace in those first seven lines.
Waz

Can't comment right now, but bumping this so that my lizard can find it.

Has Lee elvised? If she has it is a bloody shame. This is a great poem.

A914276 - A Girl and Her Imagination is also a charming read, though it's not in the AWW.

Hi there, lizard has found it. Liked it too, that first part especially. Really drags you forward, makes you read it all. A great sense of urgency.

I liked the rhythms of the ending, and the way it looked on the page. Personally, and I'm no poetry critic, I found it less accomplished than the first half. Last line's grand, though.

Thanks there Lee, hope not an Elvis.

Fatty

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