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Peer Review: A711172 - BRAM STOKERS DRACULA...MY VIEW PART 1
Researcher 185809 Started conversation Mar 16, 2002
Entry: BRAM STOKERS DRACULA...MY VIEW PART 1 - A711172
Author: JASMIN - U185809
ive had to divide it into parts,i experience problems..erors and it cuts off if its too long,thats part one theres more and you have to accept all parts or its not complete,or accept no parts atall
A711172 - BRAM STOKERS DRACULA...MY VIEW PART 1
FABT - new venture A815654 Angel spoiler page Posted Mar 16, 2002
hi jasmin
sorry to rain on your parade.
this might be better off in the writing workshop because it is in no way ready for peer review.
however, it does show potential so dont give up.
at the moment the text needs spell checking, there are only a few errors but they should be removed, and grammar checking. you have cammas all over the place. they are not like slat, use them sparingly. read it out load and breath everytime you put a comma. if you hyperventilate (caused by too much oxygen and not enough CO2) then you have too many commas.
i also recommend having a really tight structure. opinion/first person entries do make it to the guide but they have to be really tightly written. you need things like date of publication, relavent contemporary texts, contemporary literary fashions etc. so you can better explain why it made such an impression. even though you are focusing on your opinion of the book you do need to have something to run it against. a brief comparision of frankistein etc (famous books and cases of the day) is a usful extra paragraph.
you really need to know exactly where you are going with this. at the moment it's a bit of a jumbled muddle with little structure, but you are clearly passionate about it so dont let my critisism discourage you.
have a poke around the guide at other review for some ideas on structure. dont forget to search as well for things you can link to. for example, are there entries on Vampires etc that you could link to.
good luck, ignore me if you like.
FABT
A711172 - BRAM STOKERS DRACULA...MY VIEW PART 1
FABT - new venture A815654 Angel spoiler page Posted Mar 16, 2002
cammas all over the place. they are not like slat,
should have been commas and salt.
I am a fine one to talk. Now you see why my own output is so limited!
FABT
A711172 - BRAM STOKERS DRACULA...MY VIEW PART 1
Blues Shark - For people who like this sort of thing, then this is just the sort of thing they'll like Posted Mar 16, 2002
There is a basis for a good entry here, but I think it does need some work.
Also, unless Stoker had access to a time-machine, he couldn't have won the Booker as the first Booker prize was awarded in 1969.
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