h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A65083

Okay you guys, what do you think (don't be too harsh)?

Hi, Sniffly!

The thread doesn't quite work! You may need to check it.

This is an entry I can relate to, for younger children at least. My son is just six, is getting Harry Potter as a bedtime story each night, and was in to (but didn't get bought) Pokemon cards, would like, but is not going to get, a mobile phone (especially as I haven't got one).

I wonder whether the title might need a bit of tweaking. Before I opened the article, i wasn't quite sure what it was going to be about. Not sure what to suggest - something about kid speak or culture, maybe?

I think it's a reasonable start, but may need further work. It's probably a vast topic. Not having teenagers, I can't talk from experience about what they're into. It may vary widely from country to country as well.

There are a couple of small typos, one of which really made me giggle - in the section about Harry Potter, you've said 'out of your death'. The other is dinosaurs.

Worth pursuing, I think. Hope this is helpful.

Try this:

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A650837

Stay ,
WD

Unfortunetly, by nature, all of this material is dated. Perhaps you could outline the "kid fad" phenomina in general?

Gregory the Smarmy was a statue with a secret passage behind it, which Fred and George think is the one that Lee Jordan discovers. Fred and George found the passage in their first week.

Editorial Note: This conversation has been moved from 'Peer Review' to 'The Writing Workshop'.

Hi there! We feel that this entry has the potential to be something dead funny and also informative. It needs a few more facts and a little more explanation (what's 'bling bling' mean?); maybe some more examples. Also, as has been stated in the thread, the nature of the information is very time-sensitive ie, it dates easily and so we need to look at the 'kid fad' phenomena in general (again, as was stated in the threads). A good start, this - but can we make it more substantial and less easy to date?!

I think this would make a great talking point.

As the entry stands, it doesn't tell me anything I didn't already know. That said, it's nice to know I'm not alone in this sea of bewlidering jargon.

Hi again, I've updated the entry, and although once i learn GuideML it'll look far better, the content itself is a little bit improved. Hope it gets in!

This article is intellectual suicide.

haha, i laugh. not meanly or anything, i just laugh. I happen to be a teen, and u got a couple of things right... but honestly. Copying pop groups? we wear wat's comphy, fits, and looks good on us... exept guys. guys wear whatever happens to be the first thing they pull out of their closet... ok... ya... BYE!!!