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Entry: Political Philosophy - Hobbes and the Socal Contract - A9630191
Author: lf2871 - come to the darkside, we have cookies - U1781133

Hi! I submitted this too peer review a while back but it needs a polish, any sugestions? All help appreciated

I probably wont get to this for another 4 days, but I will get to it. *fingers crossed*

Just so you know it's been noticed.

Very kind of you

That didn't work. Copying it offline. Like the topic, you see, so I definitely intend to read it, eventually...

Very kind! Take as much time as you need.

Well, to start, the quote should be enclosed in the ... tag.

You might want to mention the political and philosophical background for his theory. Presumably he was not the only social contract theorist.

In the subsection "social contract" you're missing a period after the first sentence.

The second sentence in that section is rather long; I'd reccommend trying to break it in half.

>>There is a huge risk in doing this as in a state of nature you agree to such a contract, and then someone breaks it, they will not be punished or lose anything, as no concept of right and wrong exist in the state of nature. <<
suggestion: "There is a huge risk in doing this because in a state of nature if a group agrees to such a contract and then someone breaks it, they will not be punished or lose anything, as no concept of right and wrong exists in the state of nature". Just a few minor rephrasings.

>>But this still does not solve his problem, but the ‘primary covenant’ does!<
Horror! She began a sentence with "but"! If you cut the 'but' it still makes perfect sense. I'd reccommend it.

>>This involves everyone agreeing to transfer there right of <<
should be 'their' right, not 'there'. You did that a few times. Run through and check.

OK, that's all I can do now. I'll be back one day.

Hopefully I'll find time to look at this.

My head is explodeing with the amount of work i need to do..thanks leo i will get on it right after my exams finish.

I know the feeling - that's why I only got halfway through. Since you're in no rush, it's back to Harold Nicolson for me.

still there?

Yes but..blech i don't think I can face editing this article..too much work...

Righto. Was wondering. I don't think it needs editing so much as a little addition of information. Or is it reorganisation? Whatevah. Anyway, whatever floats your goat.

If you can't face it 2006, why not put it into the Flea Market? You never know, someone else might have the guts!

No way! Tis mine :-p I will do it at some point.

Pulltafingaootthan

Translation?

Translation? Get working on it!

The author seems to have - perhaps this should be moved to the Flea Market.

Alex

Seconded