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Entry: Star Wars Animated Adventures - A87871657
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

It is my new hope that this will get to the Front Page in time for Star Wars' 40th Anniversary this year!

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What is the date for that BB?

Ewoks!

Great concept for an Entry indeed - I certainly learned a lot from this. I need to check my videos and see which Ewoks episodes I have - I think I liked the first series best, as they all did seen to be similar in colour if I recall correctly...

I've only got one 'Ewoks' video

I loved that growing up, especially the 'E-E-E-E-Ewoks' song

Sadly the 40th Anniversary isn't 'Star Wars Day' (May the Fourth be with you), but 3 weeks later on May the 25th in the US.

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Same as Towel Day A87870531

Now I'm having one of those Twilight Zone moments

GB

A thorough readthrough for this...

"In fact, animation has been expanding the background of that galaxy far, far away since that time long, long time ago known as 1978."

I like this sentence, but it isn't quite right somehow - too many "time"s

"perform their voices" - should this read "voice their characters" or similar?

"Star Wars: Droids: The Adventures of R2-D2 and C-3PO also known as Star Wars Animated Adventures: Droids, or usually simply Droids for short, is an animated series concentrating on what Luke's droids C-3PO and R2-D2 endured before they were first seen in A New Hope, the first Star Wars film and commonly referred to as Star Wars."

There's a lot going on in this sentence... Perhaps rephrase to say something like:

"Droids is also known as Star Wars: Droids: The Adventures of R2-D2 and C-3PO or as Star Wars Animated Adventures: Droids. It is an animated series concentrating on what Luke's droids C-3PO and R2-D2 endured before they appeared in the first Star Wars film (Star Wars - A New Hope)"

"The characters were voiced by LucasArts Star Wars video game actors with the sole exception of Anthony Daniels, who reprised his role as C-3PO"

I think this needs to be reordered as you start by talking about characters, but then mention Anthony Daniels:

"LucasArts Star Wars video game actors provided the voices with the sole exception of Anthony Daniels, who reprised his role as C-3PO"

"although with a very different voice as the actor providing the voice in the latter film had not been chosen, which is explained in Volume Two" - what does this mean?

"voiced by voice artists" - this sounds funny - I think I guess what you mean (voiced by people who just provided voices, rather than the actors from the films).

"Rebel Alliance was started from the point of view of the crew of the Ghost." - I think this would read better if you delete "from the point of view of the crew of the Ghost" as you explain that later in the paragraph.

"popularly released on DVD" - what does this mean?

"Following its success two more 30-minute episodes were commissioned, although both were available in 45-minute extended editions Episode II" - This is another sentence dense with information...

Thanks for that input – your points are all valid and so I have amended the article accordingly. As they're all minor tweaks rather than major changes I don't think I need to comment on them, but let me know if you think more changes are needed.

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Excellent tweakage

Ah, *this* Star Wars entry!

I saw the latest film at the weekend. Confused, moi? When's the next Trek film out?

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