A Conversation for Martina Navratilova - Tennis Player

Peer Review: A66337176 - UPDATE: Martina Navratilova

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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Entry: UPDATE: Martina Navratilova - A66337176
Author: Galaxy Babe - U128652

Update on A594434, includes 2 new sections "In the Jungle" and "Greatest Battle" but the rest of Ormondroyd's excellent entry is unaltered.

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GB
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You can call me TC

Can't fault any of it - neither the old nor the new. A moving tale.


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Gnomon - time to move on

Hi GB. Good work.smiley - ok

Could you perhaps tell us in brackets the characters that Joe Swash and George Takei played?

Put a comma after 'in January 2010'.

Change the comma after 'it was still in the early stages' to a semicolon.

it could be treated with radiation therapy following a lumpectomy. Following her treatment...

Could you rephrase this to avoid the word 'following' twice in succession. Perhaps change the second one to "After her treatment".

procrastinating and putting it off for a more conventient time -- You've said the same thing twice here. Leave out the word 'procrastinating'.

Preventitive --> Preventative

Please put a tag after the in the block quote at the end.

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Changes needed in the original section:

The link to Chris Evert is broken.

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BigAl

Still remember one of the nespaper captions when Marina won her first 'Wimbledon' - it was 'Sweet Martina' smiley - biggrin.

Wondder if it might be worth emphasing that, against her own advice' she had delayed her mammogram for 4 years due to a combination of work commitments/lifestyle and her 'knowledge' of her own healthy lifestyle, including nutrition. i.e. A belief that it couldn't/wouldn't happen to someone like her smiley - erm


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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Great feedback thank yousmiley - ok

<> this is a reality TV programme, they were playing themselvessmiley - biggrin

All the typos attended tosmiley - biro

<>smiley - yikes I knew there was something else I meant to do!

Links checkedsmiley - biro
The broken link to Chris Evert has been removed and replacedsmiley - biro

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Wondder if it might be worth emphasing that, against her own advice' she had delayed her mammogram for 4 years due to a combination of work commitments/lifestyle and her 'knowledge' of her own healthy lifestyle, including nutrition. i.e. A belief that it couldn't/wouldn't happen to someone like her >>

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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - dohI realise you meant played in EastEnders and Star Trek, so I've added them nowsmiley - ok


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BigAl

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That bit's reading very well now, GB. smiley - smiley


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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

If no-one else has any more comments I'll apply this nowsmiley - ok


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Editorial Note: This conversation has been moved from 'UPDATE: Martina Navratilova' to 'Martina Navratilova - Tennis Player'.


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lil ~ Auntie Giggles with added login ~ returned


Game, set and match to the Babe!


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lil ~ Auntie Giggles with added login ~ returned


Noodles and racket strings! smiley - rolleyes


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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - racket2back atcha lil!smiley - tennisball


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