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Entry: Bob and George- The Comic - A3888804
Author: Nate Malynn - U191340

i'm hoping for a bit more informantion, and of course the spelling errors will be fixed.... eventually. comments from fans appretiated

update: added two charictors that i missed (Nate and Chadling) and fixed spelling and capitalization.

Hi Nate.

You've submitted your entry to the Writing Workshop, which means you are looking for help in getting it up to scratch as an Entry in the Edited Guide.

It seems to be fairly well-written as it stands, but it seems to assume the reader already knows what it is talking about. You use a lot of terms at the start that you never explain. You should never use a term without explaining either beforehand, or immediately afterwards, unless it is a term which is common knowledge. You talk about:

webcomic

sprite comic

stall

Megaman parts

re-enactments

All of these could be explained better than they are.

Good practice in any entry is to have an introduction, the content and then a conclusion. You've got the first two, but your entry just stops suddenly. Can you think of a way of concluding it nicely?

i'll do my best ^_^

i've got a bit of an ending now, but somehow it seems lacking... any suggestions?

Author has elvised - flea market?

Yep - a move to the FleaMarket would be best. Added to list

Note: This Entry has been added to a list of Writing Workshop removals. The Entry will hopefully be removed shortly, after which I will submit it to the FleaMarket.

Ok, the Entry has now left the EGWW.

*unsubscribes*