h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: The Presence or Potential for Language, Culture, and Consciousness in Marine Animals - A2265158
Author: AngusBeefheart - U567005

My first submission to H2G2. My final thesis paper for my Literature of Evolutionary Theory class. Enjoy.

Hello AB

I don't have time to read this properly right now, but on first sight I have one comment

Please could you think about putting in some subheaders to break up the text a bit? IMO it looks daunting without anything to lead me through the text

I'll give it proper reading time later and get back to you. Congrats on a first entry


F/b

Thanks, I took your advice and added some headings, though I tried to keep them minimal so that they wouldn't interupt the flow.

Works Cites --> Works Cited?

Just noticed a simple one:
'In controlled testing in aquariums, it has been demonstrated that octopuses have the ability to learn, not just from their own actions, but from watching others. Common octopuses (Octopus vulgaris) were trained to identify two identically shaped spheres of different colors and subsequently attack only one of them. After they had been conditioned to attack a certain sphere, they were placed in a tank with two other octopuses that had not been train.'

should be: '... had not been trained.'

Fascinating work being done in this field.

The author has Elvised.

Not quite sure where this should go. There's enough info for a spin in FM, but I wonder whether anyone else will be able to finish it.


Geggs

There is a lot of work gone into this, and I think that that should be rewarded. So therefore I saw off to the Flea Market.