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Peer Review: A1931780 - Sailing

Post 1

mattdebicki

Entry: Sailing - A1931780
Author: mattdebicki - U519290

Hey folks, I'm just finishing reading "The Salmon of Doubt" and figured I'd have to take a stab at checking out this site and participating, since DNA is my favourite author... Ever.
Anyways, hope you enjoy my writing.
Good winds!


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Post 2

Zarquon's Singing Fish!

Hi there!

Just been reading your entry and see you're new to h2g2. Welcome!

Not sure that Peer Review is the best place for this article, as generally, entries have to conform to the Writing-Guidelines As you will see, entries are usually written in the third person, unless it is for something like 'My experience of cancer' or suchlike.

So, this article would probably be more at home in one of the other forums, such as the Writing-Alternative.

A general comment about the entry is that it looks a bit unapproachable, given that it is more or less written in solid blocks of writing. Some spaces between the paragraphs would be a good idea.

There are also places where things are hinted at, such as the inadequacy of the captain, but this is not fleshed out and all I can remember is that he was a good chap, who bought you replacement sleeping bags.

smiley - fishsmiley - musicalnote


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Post 3

Cyzaki

One-stop researcher - back to entry?

smiley - panda


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Post 4

Geggs

Aye, back to entry it be.


Geggs


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