A Conversation for id like some feedback on a poem i wrote
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Agi Started conversation Mar 11, 2003
I read your poem
I felt your pain
That poem is painful
Don't do it again
If you're looking for love
Don't ask for our pity
Get out on the town
try to make yourself pretty
Build up the courage
to talk to a girl
Don't broadcast this tripe, man
you're making me hurl.
Ask how she's doing
Say she looks nice
Ask for a dance then,
But don't ask her twice
Pretend that you're moody
or a little bit bad
But a real major turn off
is "Oh, I'm so sad"
I don't want to be nasty
but this isn't the place
to search for a girly
to sit on your face
Go to a date site
That's why they exist
H2's here for writers
A point that you missed
It's here for discussion
It's here for fun
It's not where you look
for that special someone
So please don't come telling
You're down on your luck
Get a grip on yourself man
and just SUCK IT UP!
(Please note clever use of capitals to denote a really important point that you may have missed otherwise)
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