id like some feedback on a poem i wrote

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heres a poem i wrote just like to know what others think of it as ive never wrote poems before untill recently and dont even have a gcse in english pls let me know what you think
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HERE I SIT ALL ALONE
IM SO LONELY IT MAKES ME MOAN
THERES NOBODY THERE TO REALLY CARE N NOBODY TO GIVE ME A LOVING STARE
YET LIFE GOES ON
AND I STILL LOOK ON
TO THE TIME IN MY LIFE
WHEN I HAVE NO STRIFE
JUST SOMEWHERE SPECIAL
FOR MY HEART TO NESTLE
THATS ALL I ASK
SEEMS SUCH A TASK
BUT HERES TO THE DAY WHEN IM FREED OF THIS PAIN
AND FIND A PLACE FOR MY HEART TO REMAIN

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