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The second paragraph contains a mislead: "His grandson James VI of Scotland" refers not to the last male named (Henry VII) but to the one in an earlier sentence (James IV).

The ambiguity would be removed by putting it:

"Stewart's grandson, James VI of Scotland"

...though if you introduce my comma, you'd need another, thus:

Stewart's grandson, James VI of Scotland,

fixed, thanks Recumbentman

GB

There still seems to be something wrong with the generations. The paragraph in question says that James VI was the grandson of James IV ( or worse, in its original form before we just corrected it, it suggested that James VI was the grandson of Henry VII).

The subsequent sentences however suggest that James IV was the great-grandfather of James VI:

James IV begat
James V, who begat
Mary, mother of
James VI. A glance at Wiki confirms this.

So we seem to need to add "great-" to the corrected sentence.

There is a non-sentence under the subheader "Mary Queen of Scots":

Raised in France to be the wife of the young Dauphin, who briefly became King Francis II of France (1559-1560) but died at the age of 16.

This lacks a principal verb. I suggest:

She was raised in France to be the wife of the young Dauphin, who briefly became King Francis II of France (1559-1560) but died at the age of 16.

All fixed, thank you very much Recumbentman

GB