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EF: The Gentle Art of Screwing

Post 1

Rudest Elf


Entry ID: A493562 (Edited)


? It was developed for use in automatic production lines, and taken up wholheartedly by the *automotive* industry. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Henry_F._Phillips

single slot ?

successors

woodscrew

woodscrews

uninitiated

millimetres

depth

achieve

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Post 2

Gnomon - time to move on

I've done all those except for "simple slot", which is correct, and "automatic industry", which doesn't sound right but I can't think of a suitable alternative at the moment.


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Post 3

anhaga

I think that '"Robertson", with a square head' should be changed to read:

'"Robertson", with a square head, a Canadian invention and the best, most slip-resistant screw design ever,'


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Post 4

Rudest Elf


Thank you, Gnomon.

The word 'simple' is used several times in the entry, 'simple slot' just twice. Perhaps I should have given more of the context for your consideration: "Instead of a simple slot, there were two". Does changing it to 'single slot' make more sense to you now?

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Post 5

Gnomon - time to move on

Thanks, Elf. I've made the "simple slot" change. I'm still unsure about the "automated industry".

Anhaga, I've reworded that sentence to include your tribute to Canadian invention.


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Post 6

Geggs

Shouldn't "Since Phillip's innovatory approach " be "Since Phillips' innovatory approach ", since the fellow's surname was Phillips and not Phillip? It's something I often get confused over, though. I may be wrong.


Geggs


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Post 7

Gnomon - time to move on

It should be either Phillips' or Phillips's, depending on whether the author actually says one or two s sounds. I've changed it to the first one.


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Post 8

anhaga

Thanks, Gnomon! I didn't really expect my suggestion to be taken up.smiley - smiley


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Post 9

The H2G2 Editors

Great work. Many thanks all. smiley - ok


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