h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Hi Rip....
I'm a bit inexperienced at Guide Entries..having only 2 in the Guide myself..I can give you a few pointers that may help..
It would make it easier to read if you split it into paragraphs..using..at beginning of paragraph & at the end of the paragraph..&..using would improve the look..&..give it more 'life' & also I notice you have an "I am" in there..entries need to be written in the 'third person'..
Other than that..it looks ok to me....

The only other advice I'd say is..make those few changes..&..submit it to peer review..the Scouts & researcher who post there don't bite....they give very constructive advice..good luck....

Emmily

thank you, THE AUTHOR (Me) has made some changes in this and some other entries and popped them into the peer review forum. I had failed to notice that the white space and line breaks i typed were not preserved. Duh.
well, that's what proofreading is all about. it amazes me that no matter how many times one reads one's own writing, glaring examples of misspelling and bad grammar appear when another reads the peice.

thank you, THE AUTHOR (Me) has made some changes in this and some other entries and popped them into the peer review forum. I had failed to notice that the white space and line breaks i typed were not preserved. Duh.
well, that's what proofreading is all about. it amazes me that no matter how many times one reads one's own writing, glaring examples of misspelling and bad grammar appear when another reads the peice.