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Entry: Waukegan, Illinois, USA - A9112259
Author: MJ - [Do you need Worry Dolls under your pillow?] - U168592

A Flea Market Rescue, Original Entry here: A651575

Not much to be found about this small city - did what I could with the original and added some more links.

Any more ideas?

MJ

Probably only showing my lack of language knowledge here , but :

Overtime - Over time ?
Waukegan middle school is named for him - named after him ?

I really didn't intend to preview yet another entry, so just picked out what I thought wasn't correct.

Bels.

I've fixed up those bits with a little rewrite too.

Oh, and yet another thing I'm not quite sure aout :
>> Decent but expensive Italian food can be found in the near deserted downtown.<<

What's the point of expensive restaurants if the downtown is deserted ? Or did you mean to say it is nearly deserted ? If not, would nearby deserted downtown be an option ?

You know, I'm not too sure about that either . Have fixed it up, hope it's clearer now

Any more suggestions?

It does need to be more in paragraph form than it is currently, which is rather like a list of sentences.

Before the economic problems, what sort of industry was Waukegan known for? In what ways is it different from the surrounding towns? Most of the sections could use some expanding as well -- after reading this, I still don't know much of anything about what to do, where to eat, or what the city is known for. For example, the section on Shriner College could say some more. Is it founded or funded by the shriners? What is the connection with U-Chicago? What sort of students go there? What things are there for members of the community to do there, since it's mentioned later as a thing to do?


Mikey

Thanks Mikey,

I've altered the Entry a little, will add some more about food and culture in Waukegan at a later date, it's getting past my bedtime here

MJ

Ok. Stop by and post here in the thread when you've had a chance to add some more.

Might do that. Might do that indeed. Tis a might fine offer.

There we go, updated and rejigged

MJ

The format looks fine now, as does everything else about the entry. This looks to me like just the sort of thing Douglas Adams founded h2g2 for: the sharing of useful local knowledge. Good work!

Thanks a lot Orm, that means a great deal and has given me a



MJ

Glad to hear it, MJ! Great links too, by the way!

Prides meself on me links I do

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