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Entry: 'Minions' - the Film - A87870081
Author: SashaQ - happysad - U9936370

Here are my Minions - I hope you enjoy!

Well done a very good read. Although, I am not familiar with "The Minions are all small domes" drones perhaps

Thanks Bob

I have changed it to dome-shaped, so I hope that helps you to visualise them better. It's not very easy to describe their shape in words, but I'll take a photo of the DVD and it will be used as a picture for the Entry, so that will help too

They always remind me of a jelly-bean

Ah! They do look like jelly beans!

I always thought they looked like lemon tic tacs...

Is it worth mentioning that lead Minions Kevin and Dave are recurring characters who appear in 'Despicable Me' and 'Despicable Me 2' (although not as prominently)? (I'm not sure about Bob, though).

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I've added a footnote about their relatively important roles in the other two films

This is a good entry, Sasha. The only problem with it in my opinion is that you have a tendency to use a word and then repeat it. Perhaps this is deliberate, but I don't like it.

then they serve a Tyrannosaurus Rex, then a prehistoric man, then a pharaoh in Egypt, then a vampire in the Dark Ages, then Napoleon in Russia

-- repeated "then": I think this would be better as:

then they serve a Tyrannosaurus Rex, a prehistoric man, a pharaoh in Egypt, a vampire in the Dark Ages, and finally Napoleon in Russia

to become her new henchmen to support her plan to travel to England

-- repeated "to". You could try:

to become her new henchmen helping her to travel to England

The Minions are all yellow and dome-shaped and they all have two arms and two legs.
-- repeated "all". You could just leave out the first "all".

In the section "Themes", you use the word "also" six times in only four paragraphs, although they're not all in the one sentence. You could try rewording slightly.

Other minor issues:

numerous other successful and unsuccessful action comedy movies -- since every movie is either successful or unsuccessful, this seems like overkill. You could say "numerous other action comedy movies, some more successful than others"

Why is Jennifer Saunders "the other half of French and Saunders"? Isn't she as well known as Dawn French?

in the North Pole --> at the North Pole

Thanks Gnomon - good points

The repeated 'then' was a device, but I've expanded the section to make it a bit clearer that there was evolution going on, and there were gaps in the timeline, so I hope that reads better.

Other tweaks made no problem

It was Scarlet Overkill to use successful and unsuccessful, but I've rephrased it in a way that keeps the link on the less successful films

"Why is Jennifer Saunders "the other half of French and Saunders"? Isn't she as well known as Dawn French?"

She doesn't have an h2g2 Entry, let's put it that way!

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Well done, Sasha.

Thank you

Good news well done