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A87793960 - James 1st, The First Stuart King of England
Bluebottle Posted Apr 18, 2016
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Entry: James 1st, The First Stuart King of England - A87793960
Author: bobstafford - U3151547
Sorry, the first sentence should start 'James VI' not 'James IV'.
I think that we need a short sentence in the 'Path to the Throne of England' section to link James VI to Margaret. We've had Henry Tudor marry Elizabeth of York and have a daughter, Margaret, who was James V's wife and mother to James V. We need a short sentence to state that James V was succeeded by Mary Queen of Scots and James VI was her son.
Another bit to look at:
'Mary's forces were defeated, and this led to his mother’s flight from Scotland when he was just over a year old. She landed in Workington in Cumbria and was taken to Carlisle Castle where she was held.' Do you mean 'Mary's forces were defeated, and this led to her flight from Scotland when her son, the young James, was just over a year old. She landed in Workington in Cumbria and was taken to Carlisle Castle where she was held.'
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A87793960 - James 1st, The First Stuart King of England
Recumbentman Posted Apr 18, 2016
Why does Margaret have a separate paragraph within the bulleted list?
A87793960 - James 1st, The First Stuart King of England
bobstafford Posted Apr 18, 2016
No real reason apart from being the one of the subjects of the entry
Changed as suggested it looks better
A87793960 - James 1st, The First Stuart King of England
Bluebottle Posted May 19, 2016
Did you want to change the sentence:
'Margaret, Queen of Scots, wife of King James IV and mother of King James V.'
to:
' Margaret, Queen of Scots, wife of King James IV, mother of King James V and grandmother of Mary, Queen of Scots'
The next section states that James VI was the son of Mary, Queen of Scots – but you've not explained who Mary, Queen of Scots was or her relationship to Henry VII and how that meant James was heir to the throne of England.
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A87793960 - James 1st, The First Stuart King of England
Bluebottle Posted Jun 21, 2016
I've read through and it is an enjoyable, historical entry.
Are you planning on finishing more Stuart ones?
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A87793960 - James 1st, The First Stuart King of England
bobstafford Posted Jun 21, 2016
I will defiantly held back as PR was slow now we have a blue bottle on the case they will arrive soon.
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Bluebottle Posted Jul 7, 2016
Congratulations!
Just think – James VI may have come to the English throne, but he never got to h2g2's front page
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