h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Tallahassee, FL - A87730446
Author: Alan Williams - U14773786

A guide entry on Tallahasseee,FL

Do you mind if I step in with my Guide Editor powers and put a bit of GuideML on this?

Hi Alan, and welcome to the Writing Workshop!

At the moment, I's say that this is a bit too short - I don't get a feel for the place. I'm just going to fire off some ideas on ways you could expand it, please feel free to use any of them.

Some more of the history would be good, such as when it was founded, by what type of colonist, whether it grew quickly or slowly, that type of thing. Did it trade in a particular commodity or was it simply a commuter town?

A bit about how it is today - what kind of people live there now? Is it a thriving place or is it quiet and subdued? What's the weather like? What do its residents do for fun?

When you mention the attractions, a bit of detail or notable things about the attraction would be interesting. What are 'capitals' or 'mary brogan/ challenger' - tell us a bit about them or who they were and why they are important enough to be an attraction.

In terms of food, I don't know what the Red Elephant is, so a little note would be useful. Does it really only have the Red Elephant plus some yoghurt shops, or are they just the most obvious?

There are some other Entries on places in Florida - check out C235 for some inspiration.

I hope this helps. I look forward to reading more about Tallahassee.

Vip

Or pop it back into plain text, Gnomon - that might it easier to read for now while the author edits things, then perhaps think about GuideML when it gets to Peer Review stage.

Sure.

OK, I've changed this to Plain text for the moment, which should make it easier to read.

I updated it. Will continue filling it out when I have time.

I look forward to it. Do post here again when you next change a few things so we know that you've done some more work.

I didn't know about the yoghurt thing - it's not something we get here in the UK (well, certainly not in my part of the UK at least!) so you've taught me something already!

Added info about Tallahassee Zoo.