h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Spider Bites And Various Types Of Spiders - A86295108
Author: White Novo - U14937191

Any comments to improve this entry are most welcome.

There's useful stuff here, but it appears to be mixed up. The entry jumps around from one topic to another, telling us more than once, for example, that spiders are useful to have around because they kill insects.

One way to put order onto your entry is to divide it into sections. Think of the main topics you want to cover in your entry. Put in a header for each one. Just put followed by your header followed by . Some suggested headers might be:

Introduction
Spiders are Good
Spiders that Bite
Treating a Spider Bite

Choose your own, as you know best what the entry is about.

Then, and this is very important, go through the entry and decide which section each paragraph should belong to. If it is not there already, move it. After you've done this, any repetition will become obvious.

Finally, remove the "Introduction" header - it has served its purpose, but it is normal for the first section, just after the title of the Entry, to be the introduction.

I'd like to propose Flea Market as the author has ed.

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Moved to Flea Market