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Entry: Games Workshop's Forgeworld - A761122
Author: Captain Zog, Jedi Knight, user of the Farce and Thingite Ambassador to the little people (Episode 2 is ACE) - U165794

Hi, thnis is my first proper guide entry, i just want your views on it, and suggestions for improvements

Hi,
not bad for a first entry.

You've made a common mistake - that's the use of the first person "I" and "we". Editted Guide Entries should avoid that, but it's easily done. Just rephrase things to say "This researcher ..." or "The author believes...", etc.

Even after reading it, I didn't really know how the basic game was played. Maybe a bit more detail is needed on that. And I kind of understood the Forgeworld concept. But are these pieces only optically superior or do they enhance the game in some way? I mean, can they perform moves that the standard pueces can't, etc?

Awu.

Ok, I'm goin out just now but when i get back, i'll make some changes though!

I agree that some more basic information is necessary. There is quite a lot about the price of the items, so it would make the entry more balanced.

Although you say that the game is like chess, it doen't give a true 'picture' of the game. As far as I know, the game can have many players, not just two. Although it is a strategy game. I've never played it myself, but I have seen it played.

Right, I'll make sure the changes are made this afternoon

Ok, that's the changes made, i put in an example of a basic turn with some happenings see what you think.

It's looking great! But I know how the game works, so hopefully someone that doesn't will be able to tell you if it is a clear enough description.

One word about the font though - it makes it a bit hard to read.

Any font you'd recommend?

The normal one - you can revert to it by removing the font tags.

ok, that won't take a mo

Looks good.

Yes - taking shape nicely. Good job!
Awu.

Thanks, i guess i jsut wait now until a Scout sees the article and recommends it

I saw it!

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