h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

This is about finished comments welcome

I really like this project
(I am beginning to wonder how many other people look at UNI projects, but that is another matter).

Just a couple of things spotted in the first article so far - You end with 'That is a total 27 known fleets known to have existed during the time of the empire. There will have been more but these have yet to be recorded.'

Firstly, you've written 'empire' when elsewhere in the article you have written 'Empire' - I'd amend it to 'Empire' as it is a name and to be consistent.

I'm also not sure about the tense use in the wording 'there will have been more but these have yet to be recorded'. Reading that sentance unfortunately makes me want to ask; Why is something that happened 2,000 years ago yet to be recorded?

Just a couple of very minor points - insignificant quibbling over sentence structure when the essence of the article is great.

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Thanks Iwill get right on it

Just finished reading The Fleets Roman Of The Roman Empire 2180.

Couple of minor things I would suggest. Firstly, again, do you want to use 'empire' or 'Empire'? I'd also, at least the first time you mention him, clarify that by 'Cæsar' you mean Gaius Julius Cæsar, and not Augustus Cæsar, any other Emperor, member of the Julio-Claudian dynasty etc. Even in the Roman period, Emperors were commonly called 'Cæsar', hence Suetonius' 'Twelve Cæsars'.

I'd also consider re-wording and clarifying the first two sentances of the second paragraph slightly: 'Because of the non citizen, auxiliary status of the Greeks, Egyptians and other conquered seafaring nations that built the ships and provided the crews. This altitude never changed even though the empire became dependant upon its many fleets.' I know what you mean, but it is a confusing way of putting it - especially 'altitude'.

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First observation Part1 done comment please,

Off to look at part 2

Is that better comments please

I think it's better, yes...

...To be honest, at the moment I'm not sure whether I should be commenting on these articles yet. The other conversation implied you are getting a sub-editor for these articles, and then they'll go in Peer Review, and then I'll be able to comment.

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Is that right as I must admit I'm a little unsure of the process at the moment...

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Better some action than none at all <BB<

Have you got a sub lined up? I'm still waiting for one for my Uni project, but hope to hear something soon.

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Same here - I've had no takers either.

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