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Entry: Roman Navy Ranks - A69451374
Author: bobstafford - U3151547

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Hi Bob, a few nitpicks from me I'm afraid

The roman navy = Roman

Axillaries were paid 16% less = Auxiliaries

class was an important factor it ment = meant

The Praefecti ('Fleet commander') The command structure of the fighting men in the fleet was the same as in any legion, however as the navy was considered as an inferior service. = the sentence doesn't make sense, I suggest you drop the word "however"

As the appointments were largely political and almost all of the Prefects were totally reliant on the experience of their subordinates to command the fleets effectively. = doesn't make sense, suggest drop the first word "As" thus:
The appointments were largely political and almost all of the Prefects were totally reliant on the experience of their subordinates to command the fleets effectively.

These men also known as marines, but regarded as common soldiers = These men were also...

Remiges are also flight feathers on the wings of a bird they are set in pairs as if on the rowing benches of a galley, a term derived from the galleys.
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that's a lovely piece of information Bob if you could just put a semi-colon here:
Remiges are also flight feathers on the wings of a bird; they are set in pairs as if on the rowing benches of a galley, a term derived from the galleys.

Header "The Immunes (Specialists)." please remove the full-stop

That section possibly needs to be bullet-pointed with what you have in bold as the bullet-points, and a space inserted between each separate section. It should look like:
The Beneficiaries Classis (the quartermaster) Responsibilities included the recruitment and welfare of the ships civilian crew, and was the civilian paymaster. Other duties included procuring the ships stores and ammunition, and supervising the ships maintenance whilst in port.
The Iatros (the medical officer equivalent to the army Capsarius a doctor or Medicus).
The Roman navy had a very proficient medical service similar to that of the army; this was not equalled for 1,400 years.
Cushos Armerum ('Armourer‘)
Whose responsibility was the care and maintenance of the weapons and equipment of the Cohors Classica, and of the ships ballista.
etc. (remember the close tag after the last so it updates)

('Armourer‘) has a kinky apostrophe there, could you remove it and insert a straight apostrophe please?

The Proreta (the lookout) worked in conjunction with the Naute whilst in shallow waters guiding the ship through shallow waters, or supervising the beaching of the ship.
That repetition could be removed thus:
The Proreta (the lookout) worked in conjunction with the Naute whilst guiding the ship through shallow waters, or supervising the beaching of the ship.

these men were trained wood and metal workers, thay were supervised = *they* were supervised

The celeusta (the officer in charge of the rowers) was the officer who supervised the rowers relaying, the orders of the navarch regarding speed and direction to the rowers. The speed was governed by using a drum or hammer to provide the rowers with a rhythm to keep the rowers in time and control the speed.
I recall the scenes in the 1959 version of Ben Hur when Judah spent 4 years in the rowing section (they *were* slaves who were chained to the oars). The new Roman commander tested the mettle of the rowers by ordering the drummer to go faster and faster until it was eventually ramming speed, exhausting the rowers. I guess it gives some idea of what conditions were like below decks, especially when their ship was eventually rammed and some couldn't escape the carnage. It's a memorable part of the film (there's a link A7440437 if you want it but I'm not sure it's relevant as these were slaves and not the Roman remiges of which you speak)

Good work Bob, I'll try and get to your other articles today

GB

All done GB I hope...

Thanks for the time and interest it is nice when people resd the entrirs


What do you think so far

Brilliant

I think you're fantastic in your passion for the Roman era, Bob

And you with the stars

Any more comments

It looks good to me

This looks ready. Again thanks for all your work on this, bob and all.

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Well done Bob

GB