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Two more trivial things:

between 44 BC to 54 AD --> between 44 BC and 54 AD

You still have Agean in one place when it should be Aegean.

Thank you

between 44 BC to 54 AD --> between 44 BC and 54 AD (done)

You still have Agean in one place when it should be Aegean. (I cant find this)

This looks almost done any more comments

Entry: A69448440 - The Roman Navy

You might consider adding dates for the fall of Carthage and the Roman withdrawal from Britain.

The Expanstion to the West section could do with some work, as it is still jumps a bit. It talks about the Classis Britanica and the Rhine and Danube fleets, and then talks about a time before this in which no Roman ship was outside the Mediterranean. Reword this so that things happen in the correct chronological order. And read what you've written when you're finished, to check it makes sense.

Classis nova Libyca -- Can you check the spelling of Libyca, please?

near modern Briten --> near modern Birten

during a Batavian uprising in 69 AD -- I can't find any reference to Batavia on the web. Can you check the spelling?

Can you please put the word statio in italics, because it is a foreign word used in an English sentence.

The subheader "The River Danube" is unnecessary, since the previous section was also about the River Danube.

took part in Caesars expedition to Britain in 55 BC. --> took part in Julius Caesar's expedition to Britain in 55 BC.

Please put a subheader "Other River-based Fleets" just before the paragraph which starts "Other Fluvial Fleets".

You've written Aries (with I) in a few places when it should be Arles (with an L).


I don't understand this at all:

"Despite this Aries for supremacy with Massalia modern Marseilles another Phoenician city,"

Besides the fact that Massalia was Greek, not Phoenician, the sentence just doesn't make any sense.

Footnotes:

The Parisii were the tribe the Romans annexed by the Romans -- too many Romans.

Classis nova Libyca -- Can you check the spelling of Libyca, please?
As in
Scientific Name: Ictonyx libyca
Common Name/s: English – Libyan Striped Weasel, Saharan Striped Polecat, Saharan Striped Weasel

during a Batavian uprising in -- I can't find any reference to Batavia on the web. Can you check the spelling?
Batavian revolt link here
www.livius.org/ba-bd/batavians/revolt01.html -



near modern Briten --> near modern Birten - Done


Can you please put the word statio in italics, because it is a foreign word used in an English sentence. -Done

The subheader "The River Danube" is unnecessary, since the previous section was also about the River Danube. - Done

took part in Caesars expedition to Britain in 55 BC. --> took part in Julius Caesar's expedition to Britain in 55 BC.v -Done

Please put a subheader "Other River-based Fleets" just before the paragraph which starts "Other Fluvial Fleets". -Done

You've written Aries (with I) in a few places when it should be Arles (with an L). - Done



Footnotes:

The Parisii were the tribe the Romans annexed by the Romans -- too many Romans. - Done

TO DO
I don't understand this at all:

"Despite this Aries for supremacy with Massalia modern Marseilles another Phoenician city,"

Besides the fact that Massalia was Greek, not Phoenician, the sentence just doesn't make any sense.

There are other things To Do in my posting, unless you decide you don't want to do them. If so, be sure to let us know.

TO DO
I don't understand this at all:

"Despite this Aries for supremacy with Massalia modern Marseilles another Phoenician city,"

Besides the fact that Massalia was Greek, not Phoenician, the sentence just doesn't make any sense.

Done Now

Thanks for reading and commenting please let me know if there is anymore to do.

When you've done the stuff in posting 23, I'll have another look at it, Bob.

I'm sure Massalia was a Greek colony, not a Phoenician one, Bob.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Arles

And others sites state they had a trading post in the port. I could simply drop the line if it causes a problem let me know compromise is better as it is not relevent to the entry.

You might consider adding dates for the fall of Carthage and the Roman withdrawal from Britain.

The Expanstion to the West section could do with some work, as it is still jumps a bit. It talks about the Classis Britanica and the Rhine and Danube fleets, and then talks about a time before this in which no Roman ship was outside the Mediterranean. Reword this so that things happen in the correct chronological order. And read what you've written when you're finished, to check it makes sense.

I am haveing a re think about the above (where to put the dates) I have had a tweek but it still neeeds more work still thinkind.

I dont want anyone to think they are wasting thair time.

Bob, when I said that Massalia was Greek, why did you link to a wikipedia article about Arles? It doesn't say anything about the Phoenicians in Massalia.

Sorry I picked the wrong link (I checked both) they were both trading stations.

But the Wikipedia article on Massalia doesn't mention the Phoenicians at all.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Massalia

Prehistory and classical antiquity

Marseille, which can be called the oldest city in France, was founded in 600 BC by Greeks from Phocaea as a trading port under the name Μασσαλία (Massalia; see also List of traditional Greek place names). The connection between Μασσαλία and the Phoceans is mentioned in Book I, 13 of the History of the Peloponnesian War by Thucydides.[11] The precise circumstances and date of founding remain obscure, but nevertheless a legend survives. Protis, while exploring for a new trading outpost or emporion for Phocaea, discovered the Mediterranean cove of the Lacydon, fed by a freshwater stream and protected by two rocky promontories

Do we have a different opinion about the above Hutchinson says much the same,

Marseille was settled by Phocaean Greeks from Asia Minor and named Massalia or Massilia. It later planted colonies of its own along the northern Mediterranean coast. In 49 BC it was taken by Julius Caesar from the supporters of Pompey, and became a free city. In the 9th century it was destroyed by the Arabs.

I am happy to drop the Phocaean refs if we dont agree as it is not important to the entry.

You seem to be confusing Phocaean Greeks with Phoenicians, who were not Greek, but came from the Lebanon.

The connection between Massalla and the Phoceans is mentioned in Book I, 13 of the History of the Peloponnesian War by Thucydides

That part it seems to be some connection also what are Phocaean Greeks from Asia Minor

Bob, for Christ's sake read what I've written.

When I have a little time.

You haven't time to read a single sentence?

I give up.

I want to go through the whole thing properley