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Whoami - iD dislikes punctuation Started conversation Nov 16, 2001
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An article that I ought to have done a few weeks earlier to make today's Front Page. Has a strong section on donations at the mo, but this could be reduced for the sake of the longevity of the article...
Whoami? 
A657281 - BBC Children In Need
Whoami - iD dislikes punctuation Posted Nov 16, 2001
Please? Somebody? It *is* CIN tonight...
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Azara Posted Nov 16, 2001
Hi, Whoami?
When things are this quiet, I always get the sneaking feeling that something very interesting is happening somewhere else!
I think your entry is really excellent. It is very polished (which is what I'd expect from a Sub-Editor!) and it covers the topic very thoroughly without being too long. Perfect balance!
The only thing I'd even consider changing is in the paragraph headed 'Who are you helping?', where you say 'It helps those who have felt forced to leave home because of this.' Since the previous sentence mentions cancer, abuse and domestic violence, I think it might be better to specify 'because of violence and abuse', or 'because of difficult circumstances', if you're trying to avoid repetition.
Nice work!
Azara 
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Whoami - iD dislikes punctuation Posted Nov 17, 2001
Thanks, Azara, I'll alter the stuff appropriately on Sunday afternoon. It was perhaps a little rushed - I wanted to get it at least into PR for the big day!
Whoami?
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Nightshade, Guardian Angel and Grey Lady Posted Nov 19, 2001
This is a very well-written article. Hope it gets through in time! 
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Whoami - iD dislikes punctuation Posted Nov 19, 2001
Too late - CIN was last Friday. Oh well, it's still a useful article to have ready for next time around!
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h2g2 auto-messages Posted Nov 27, 2001
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Congratulations!
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Zak T Duck Posted Nov 27, 2001
Congrats Whoami!
er, do I need to explain the drill since you're a scout? 
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Whoami - iD dislikes punctuation Posted Nov 27, 2001
Oh, and Croz, I'm sure I'll manage - I know what happens next only to well... 
*shows off sub-ed and scout badges*
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