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A86180600 - Another attempt at saving the best for last
frannie Started conversation Jul 13, 2011
Entry: Another attempt at saving the best for last - A86180600
Author: frannie - U14838357
Auntie Eileen
Her thoughts were sheltered by her shallow smile,
And buffered by her orange lipstick.
Yet somehow they filtered through;
Men never gave me nothing
And now you can have some.
As she punctured the atmosphere
With her pernicious perfect grin.
I watched her as she danced to the memory
Of her white days, and the babies who slept
On her sideboard in picture frame cots.
As she flicked her fag ash and waltzed on.
Mum and Nan whispered her life as a warning
As she washed up the plates in cold water.
And looked like a film star.
As she went over the script in her head.
My life is a soiled sheet
The world is a wet place
And everyone falls through the hole.
A86180600 - Another attempt at saving the best for last
Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor Posted Jul 13, 2011
I think I like that lady. 
As Don Marquis said, 'There's a dance in the old dame yet.'
A86180600 - Another attempt at saving the best for last
minorvogonpoet Posted Jul 14, 2011
I like this, too.
Very real, yet it remains poetry.
A86180600 - Another attempt at saving the best for last
Post Team Posted Jul 14, 2011
Hi frannie, I like this, just like the other one.
I'm sad to say that you missed the 'saving the best for last' deadline by nearly a week, but I'd be very happy to publish them in 
, even if they can't be voted on any more.
Bel
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