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Entry: My Rememberance day - A42975840
Author: benmayla - U13666723

A42975840-`My Rememberance day`

I like this, both for the rhymes and for the sentiment.

I wonder if it would work better if you put it in conventional verse form?

Also: 'Remembrance' not 'Rememberance'.

Thank you for your suggestions. You can clearly see I have no literery skill. I don`t know the rules of poetry. I just write down what comes in to my thoughts at the time, and cobble it down on paper. I know I could read and hopfully learn the rules. Perhaps I will if some think the effort would be worth it. REMEMBRANCE ! of course, thanks. Thanks for your kind advice.

If you just arrange the lines one after another, and stop when you get to the rhyming word, I think you will have a good beginning.

Arranging the lines into stanzas is optional, as far as I am concerned.

Welcome to the writing workshop. If you're looking for advice on poetry and the like, I think you'll find it here in abundance.

OK I`ll give it a try with the next one. Thanks.

You may say you don't have any literary skill but I like this

It establishes a vivid image and conveys a message that seems deeply felt.

I agree with Dmitri that, if you break the lines after the rhymes, it will produce a more traditional poem shape.

Thank you for both your kind comments and advice, they are very much appreciated.

Hello benmayla, we're delighted to inform you that we've chosen your beautiful poem for inclusion in .

You can find it here: A59895724


Bel

Hi, I'm not quite sure who I am writing to here. Thank you for selecting my poem for 'The Post' over two years ago. I never new. However I did cringe when I read that I had omitted a word and no one had spotted my mistake.

It should read " sixty years " not " sixty " is there any way it could be changed ?

Of course the other error was the title "Rememberance" Where as it should read - Remembrance.

Thanks to all.

B.A.A. Hayes