h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A571484
Any comments?

I don't see anything 'fundamentally absurd' there

You've started right into writing entries and even mastered GuideML!

Ok, as to the entry:
The paragraphs look better if you enclose them with para tags (they work just like any other HTML/GuideML tag):
*contents here*

You could write something more about the bread itself, just to justify the header (or re-title it to 'Toast and Toasters' or so).
Eg, that toast is wheat bread and white (in contrast to the greyish rye bread which is somewhat hard to find in the UK or USA), the uniform size of the slices etc.

Just a few words more, and you're all set!

Thanks for the advice and for the paragraph tip.

Oh, I forgot (or did you insert that now?) - please don't use 1st person style for entries which are meant to go into the Edited guid. 'I' and 'we' are generally frowned upon by the PTB (the Powers That Be). 'Research has found..' or something like that is acceptable.

Hee hee, there's also a perpetual motion engine which was built around toast and cats. Cats always fall onto their legs, and toast always onto the buttered side. So if you glued or otherwise attach a buttered slice of toast to the back of a cat and threw the package out of the window (I say: /if/, I don't say /do it/ !), there are counteracting moments of the cat and the toast which will lead to everlasting rotation instead of them both falling to the ground...

Thanks - when I re-edited I forgot about the first-person thing. I've changed it.

Well, any further comments should be directed to the Peer Review thread for this entry, which is at http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/F48874?thread=119357

This isn't bad news -- naaah, this entry has been recommended for the Edited Guide

You got there before me!
This thread should now be disposed off for the reasons Bossel said above.

Kenrick

Editorial Note: This conversation has been moved from 'The h2g2 Writing Workshop' to 'A Brief History of Toast'.

This Conversation has been moved because thias entry has now been recommended by a Scout from Peer Review.