h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A537040

Here is another attempt to capture a sense of place. I hope you like it. Tell me if you don't, and, if you are feeling helpful, why you don't.

Er...crocodiles ?

*ducks quickly as reference flies over MDS' head*

This is certainly an evocative piece. It creates a vivid impression of what sounds like a desperately beautiful area. You have a definite flair for this kind of descriptive prose.

The title of the piece is perhaps a little misleading. The article deals with the whole region, rather than the just the one village. 'Lacoste and Surrounding Areas' or something similar might be more accurate.

Also, it might be more dramatic to start the article at the beginning of the second paragraph. The first couple of sentences seem a little redundant. It is the second section that really grabs you by the throat.

All told, an excellent entry.

MDS

Lacoste is a brand of sportswear, whose logo is a crocodile.

My titles always get changed, anyway! (I am sure it will end up as Lacoste, Vaucluse, France, in the manner of h2g2 rules etc., so your point will be halfway met.)I left it as Lacoste because most people would expect to find something about polo shirts etc., which is also why that introductory sentence is there. Just to disillusion them!

Thanks vm your comments. I shall ponder.

I never did know very much about sport.

MDS

...but I know what I like.

Congratulations!

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Well done!

MDS

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Congratulations!

Thanks, MDS, I didnt get the chance to say so before, but I always appreciate your appreciation!