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Well, In we do not have any article about Zagreb Cyber Cafee scene -
And I made review of them.

http://www.h2g2.com/A468551

Am I post this in the right forum or what?
Please, this is my first attempt.
I am not sure if I am doing wrong...

No worries. You're doing fine.

What you have written is interesting, but it would be much more interesting if your descriptions of the places you take us to were more detailed.

JTG

In what kind more detailed?
HOw to get there, or how sloow surfing there could be, or more about equipment...
Well, it is like talking about restaurants...
food is ... well, there do not sell food,
you want prices?
Or interior decoration...
your need, my command, sir.

Whatever you feel is most pertinent: a chat with a pretty girl (not a 'chick') in a mini skirt here; a description of the neighbourhood or the decor there; and another cup of coffee, while we wait for John-the-gardener's page to load, at the place notorious for it's slow access... just a little more information to make or visit last longer.

JTG

Yeah. In progress...

So how are you progressing? I think John's comments were spot on.
Let us know how things are going!
- X

I think it'd be better titled something like "Cyber Cafes in Central Zagreb" - and just talk about the cafes, rather than being distracted by, say, Gelipters and suchlike...

And yeah, I'd want to expand a ouch - especially on Iskon, for example, which you kind of gloss over...

Regardless of which, progress seems to be slow: what would people say to a move to the workshop?

Hey, Lucinda -- here's a belated second to your Workshop move.

Mikey

Editorial Note: This Conversation has been moved to the new 'Flea Market' Forum.

This is where we move any Peer Review, Writing Workshop or Alternative Writing Workshop Conversations where the original author has *not* posted to h2g2 for three months. This prevents the active Review Forums from clogging up with dormant entries, but in the Flea Market they can be picked up by others and polished off.

Although we do need more articles on Zagreb and Croatia, I'm afraid I'd like to propose Back to Entry for this article.

I don't think there's enough to be rescued here as the article is a little confusing to read, and I suspect that a dozen years later, may well be entirely out of date anyway.

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