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Peer Review : A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 1

shagbark

Entry: Little Richard - A45002567
Author: member of the central US resear chers group and the Viewer Tag annoyance League-call me shagbark - U170775

About a pioneer in rock and roll-Hipefully this will be up to standards this time.


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Post 2

Not-so-bald-eagle


Great! Clicking on 'Lucille' had me dancing away!

Nitpick: In the 2nd paragraph, as you're using parethesis (), you don't need commas as well


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Post 3

shagbark

() removed smiley - ok-shagbark


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Post 4

shagbark

smiley - musicalnote well, now mama, papa, told me son you better watch your step-...when you're rockin' and a rollin' can't you hear your mama call- good golly Miss Mollysmiley - musicalnotesmiley - spacesmiley - lurk


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Post 5

Noth€r

smiley - headhurtssmiley - run


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Post 6

shagbark

smiley - lurk


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Post 7

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

Love it Shagbark

Good luck this time
just one query - the word Specialty is American English I think - we brits tend to say Speciality - but please correct me any better grammarians out there?


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Post 8

Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups

This is shaping up nicely. smiley - smiley

Just a few nitpicks smiley - biro

<> should be '5 December, 1932,'

Full stop directly after name no space before it

I think there are links to be had such as one on Elvis Presley

<> should be '12 January,1952,'

<> should be 'later'

Be careful with Americanisms and their translation to English
And be aware that numbers over ten should be written out like 11, 12, 13 etc

Footnotes come directly after the last word. There is no gap.

In my opinion footnote 2 is unnecessary you would be better off writing 'In The Life and times of Little Richard the Quasar of Rock by Charles White he is quoted as saying.....'

Do you know who this 'one person' was?

Keep Writing smiley - biro


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Post 9

shagbark

I am using Specialty because that is the official name of the recording studio. Perhaps I fporgot to capitalize it?


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Post 10

shagbark

>> The thing I like about Richard's ministry, is that he never pushes a person. He just shows them what God has done for him. and that is a beautiful philosophy.<< that is quoted from his biography I do not know who said it.
I am not aware of what amaricanisms Opti is referring to unless it is
awap bop a loomop (I know you clean a loo with one if that is what he meant)


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Post 11

shagbark

didn't we used to have a smiley for ??


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Post 12

shagbark

Here is a link to Specialty Records
should I put it in the article?
http://www.history-of-rock.com/specialty.htm


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Post 13

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

Yes, sorry Shagbark, it was the Header 'Specialty Recording' that I thought looked odd. So used to reading British English you see. I think the link is needed, and perhaps a revision on the Header, maybe just 'Specialty Records' as that is the name of a company. smiley - smiley


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Post 14

shagbark

Header changed, link added. Got to smiley - run RL calling. I'll check back on this tommorrow smiley - smiley.


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Post 15

shagbark

shagbark returns smiley - lurk


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Post 16

shagbark

I see we have completed our standard incubation period.
Anyone see improvements to be made?


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Post 17

shagbark

Link to Cocaine article added smiley - zen.


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Post 18

shagbark

smiley - lurk good golly Miss Molly are the changes done?



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Post 19

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

This is a definite improvement on the original submission. Well done, Shagbarksmiley - ok


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Post 20

Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups

Americanisms like 'neighborhood' should be changed to English spelling smiley - birosmiley - smiley


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