h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Hello Everybody,BBC, Fellow Last Laugh Entrants,

This is my (Yaffa's) entry for the BBC3 Last Laugh Competition
I have never attempted anything such as this before so be as harsh or as kind as you like about 'it'.
Any comment would be much appeciated.....
Thank you.
Yaffa

hi Yaffs. Couldn't see the actual script, but I found this message at least! I hope you are impressed!

Hi CGC
Have you got BBCi login?
If not, create one for yourself, log in and then just click blue link (title of my scipt)
I think that you should be able to open it without a 'logon', though, so to speak.
Thanks for taking the time to try

Y.

Yippee!! I found you and your script. I used Ducks www thingy and put in my bookmark, wasn't that clever, I'm doing to read your script after tea, Feeling good

Hi Yaffa

I'm not too sure what I enjoyed the most, your dialogue or the stage directions. To be honest I'm hopeless at giving comments to the LQIH scripts. I didn't really get the first twenty minutes so I think anything goes for the last ten. I think the passing reference to the sitcom with the Madona with the big boobies was rather apt as I kind of saw this comedy as being of that ilk. I chuckled along to myself as I read it though I'm not exactly sure how you are visually going to show the whole kerfuffle with the right testicle. The directions were very detailed and I can imagine the director thinking how the hell do I do that?

I enjoyed reading it and you certainly had a gag every few minutes. However, I'm not sure blood goes down well in a sitcom. Or the level of swearing for the intended audience for this style of sitcom. Plus while your stage directions are amusing they are meant to be informative rather than part of the comedy.

I enjoyed reading it anyway, so you at least brought pleasure to one person.

Morning FP, thanks for looking, hope your studies went well late last night.
Taa very much for raising pertanent points.
I enjoyed writing the 'directions' almost as much as the diologue, M&G gave lots of 'stuff' for my teeth to get into.

Language, well I abhor use of continual extreme bad language but I guess it depends upon when the prog makers put LL out - after the shed of water perhaps
I tried to put myself in Harris in M&G's characters place, their situation, I would be angry, wouldn't you?

I only hope that LQIH makes it, we all have a chance.
I also hope that more LL'ers use this great site, it's different!
Love it, love LL, love, well the universe & Everything (including BBC3)
Thanks FP.
Y....

Well I can't find your blue link, Yaffa. Where is it? ugh this board is weird. Mary Ann

Top of the page, in blue.
Y.

No I'm not talking to myself again, yes you are, but I thought that it would be best to mention, before reading that there is a certain amount of bad language in my ending.
I would like to apologise in advance, if this offends you.
Yaffa.

Bad launguage be buggered,
Sorry, I should have written before,
C my daughter and I read through twice! she was on the floor.LOL.
She's at that age where rudeness is cool.
Me, When I think of some of the first acts I've been in! If my drama group get back together, smaller audience than intended but..

Rambling, I'm just up,
Me and C loved it so audience from 15 to 4HUMpH..

see you, chrissie.

Yaffa... you are talkin to yourself again
Am I?
Yes, you are. Now be quiet and let these people go.
Are they My people?
Yes..... Now for the last time let your people go!

Hi Yaffa
This is your imaginary son, sorry, forgotten my name - or is it your imagination
Anyway dad good luck with the competition

Yaffa you're talking to yourself again aren't you?

Sorry darling, It won't happen again...... unless....

Yaffa get back inside your head right now

Alright lovvie