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Entry: The Flemish or Belgian Heavy Horse - A34140656
Author: ST - MK II - The Pussycat of HooToo - U2723325

This is No.5 on my list and the last for now. Have 3 more breeds on my list but am taking a break from horses for now.
Comments welcome as usual.

ST, I will have a look in the morning, I am too tired now. I've had a busy day.

I don't blame you for having a breather - yu can have too much of a good thing.

Hope you have a nice weeken, well, what's left

Take care

Websailor

Hi there ST

In the first paragraph, you mention it as being named as the Flemish heavy horse. You repeat this later on at the start of the brief history section, where it is better placed. I would suggest changing you first paragraph to:
>>The Belgian heavy horse is, as the name suggests, from Belgium, a small European country with abundant rainfall and very fertile soil...<<

there size and strength >> *their* size and strength

>>The Belgian heavy horse were exported<< mixed singular/plural: should be either <> or <>

>>Second World War saw a decline in their commercial use as mechanisation<< put a comma after 'commercial use'

>>Their numbers dropped dramatically as a result however<< again add a comma, or possibly a semi-colon, after 'result'

>>it's country of origin<< remove the apostrophe

You talk about it as the Belgian horse throughout the entry, so shouldn't the title be swapped round: The Belgian or Flemish Heavy Horse?

Another great entry here

There was just one little thing I picked up on

'armored' is spelt 'armoured'

I agree with all the other comments, except that it should read:

< its' country of origin>, the apostrophe was just in the wrong place.

Could I also suggest you try and reduce the number of horses you have in the first paragraph? There are rather a lot.

Websailor

That should refer to the first paragraph of 'A Brief History' - there are seven!

Websailor

>>the apostrophe was just in the wrong place<<

It's not in the wrong place; its place is to be gone

Thanks folks. Updated as requested.

h5

Bows to superior knowledge.

Websailor

Hi ST,

A good interesting read. Just a few minor nit-picks to make it flow better .

Belgium is in the area of Western Europe where these big black horses known as Flemish or Belgian originated <> and were actually referred to as the great horses by medieval writers.

There was never a need to import any other breeds into Belgium itself as this was the country of origin for the heavy horse breed <> and all they had to do was to refine and fix the genetics they already had.

As a result of this there followed an improvement in the breeding methods which meant a fixed breed type was established <> and the draft horse of Belgium became a national heritage and a sought after treasure at home and abroad.

It was an effort that was surrounded by controversy at the time over which type of draft horse was best for the Americans<> but it also <> created a great deal of interest in the breed.

Though <> used mainly for showing and some advertising campaigns for various companies some have been put back into use in forests.


Nigel

's Nigel. All done.

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* As you have changed Though to They were, perhaps a 'but' after companies and before 'some' would help.

Websailor

Websailor, I done did that.

Nice article. I'm not much of a horse/animal person but it was an interesting read all the same.

One comment:

"Belgium government" -> "Belgian government"

(There's two places in the article for this).

M

Pointy, Updated and thanks.

Oh, ST!


You said Bel***m!

well, I like to push the boat out now and then tha knows.

Don't forget the paddles

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