h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

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This entry is about houses. The kinds of houses that lots of twenty-something college students end up renting for several years, and passing down to their friends, and so on... It is informative, funny, and well written. It includes a case-study of one such house. Please enjoy!

I enjoyed that. It's interesting and entertaining. It seems very American - reminds me of the American Lampoon film, "Animal House", which I really enjoyed.

I noticed a few interesting spellings as well. If they're American spellings please forgive my interference. They are:

priveledges (privileges), mudane (mundane), corespond (correspond), momentos (mementos), pallate (palate), mold (mould), harbor (harbour), fecal (faecal), wonderous (wondrous), grandious (grandiose), millenium (millennium), Revoloution (Revolution).

"Group house," appears twice in the first two sentences. The comma should be outside the quotes.

The "roach" - "Gonzales is his english name": English should have an initial capital.

What's a "copper bb"?

Nit pick over.

Good stuff.

Unfortunately (for you), the first person narrative should be changed. Edited Entries should be third person narratives to accomodate additional material from other Researchers, which might be contributed at a later date. Sadly, the photograph will have to go too because the h2g2 Art Team are alone blessed with the honour of illustrating the Guide... and a fine job they do too . The part about El Castillo is a bit too... well, it reads rather like a fairtale. It is interesting and quite funny; but it's not a description of group homes as much as a fond (and slightly fantastic) reminiscence about a particular group home. For that reason, I would be inclined to omit it.

JTG

Thanks for the great suggestions!! I'll edit it a bit.

Glad to be of service.

JTG

If you would like to look at an edited version now, I have reposted it as The "College House." I followed your suggestions. Thanks.

Well done! I'd say we're looking at a sure thing here.

JTG

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