h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

The idea behind this is extremely interesting. The concept of everyone having a Jinni as their own guardian (relative to Christian belief of a Guardian Angel) is fascinating in this portrayal of religion.

However one aspect in reading this contribution which tends to dilute the message, are the constant references to the quotations – this marks the piece as a form of scripture in places as opposed to a report.

As a piece of reporting, I would respectfully suggest the quotes be used for source only, and would re-write this from the view of what the Jinn are, how they came into being, their purpose and anything else which might interest the reader – keeping it simple and to the point.

The religious context will be imbued in the report of these beings during the writing however, in my opinion, should not detract from the report itself, which appears to be the case in its present form.

Hope something of my reflection on this piece is helpful to you.