h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: FooLish CLeverness - A2058275
Author: Squance - U532583

my first submission.... looking for any help and guidance that can be offered.
thanks

Hey, Squance.

Firstly, you seem to have pressed ? instead of ', but don't worry, it's probably a technical fault.

Secondly, i'm not precisely sure here whether you're aiming for a description of the show itself or what you think. If the latter is the case, move it to the Alternative Writing Workshop. If the former, then you'll need to get rid of all the first person bits, which you use quite frequently. The Edited Guide is supposed to be third person (ie this researcher felt that, one must realise, etc.). Don't feel bad - I made the exact same mistake on my first edited entry, and it went on to become Editor's Selection!

Still, what's there is good, and I enjoyed reading it. It has given me another animé to watch out for, assuming they ever bring something this cool out in Ireland. Looking forward to more of your entries!

thanks for the tip, i have taken out all of the first person that i found and i corrected the "?"s. i would love any other critisim or input.
thanks.
squance.

what do i should i do with this article if no one else comments on it?

Move it into PeerReview. It certainly seems to be good enough to try to get it into the Edited Guide.


Geggs