h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Up Date English Chartered Markets: The Home Counties - A19993323
Author: Bob Stafford. ACE ; - Keeper of The Treacle Shadow - Support the Beeblecasters @ A29805636 - U3151547

Back again removed in error

Continued from here http://www.bbc.co.uk/dna/h2g2/brunel/F6642576?thread=6181199&show=20&skip=0#pi17 Any more comments please

Bob which entry is this an update for?

GB

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day or *days*

existing [insert space](older)



pre date the Conquest = pre-date

All done sorry I took my time on this

That's OK Bob, I know all about time management and lack of it being the main problem

The correction should be <>, Bob. Remove the apostrophe,

So this isn't an update to an already edited entry then? I'm a tad confused. If it isn't then it'll need picking by a Scout, who generally ignore updates.

All done

This is a new entry part four of five the next is the south coast

Thanks Bob

Any more ideas

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however in 1067

eg they might have been peaceful but the still got a castle just in case

is there a better way of putting tha t

Any more ideas GB

It still says "however 1067" Bob

Sorry I must have not pressed update

I've emailed the Scout forum for some other reviewers, Bob, as I don't have any more time today

Hi - I'm reading this now - back soon to comment

Very informative - well done

Here are some questions and/or typos

>>The southern counties, This area became the dominant force in southern Britain under King Alfred of Wessex.<<
Is "The Southern Counties" supposed to be a sub-header?

>>The year 900 AD, saw a new king Edward I the Elder 900 - 924 AD.<<
I'd suggest
->The year 900 AD saw a new king, Edward I the Elder, who reigned for another 24 years.<-


>>His reign saw the establishment of new markets, charters were granted the counties of Berkshire, Buckinghamshire, Essex, Hertfordshire, Middlesex, Oxfordshire, and Surrey.<<
I'd suggest using a semi colon for the break
->His reign saw the establishment of new markets; charters were granted the counties of Berkshire, Buckinghamshire, Essex, Hertfordshire, Middlesex, Oxfordshire, and Surrey.<-


>>Alfred also built a strong defensive system for the town, established a royal mint and granting the charter in 900. <<
*granted*

>>The county has a long history and the oldest town Colchester with a founding date 10 AD, before the Romans<<
and *has* the oldest town, Colchester

>>Situated on a main north south route and an a navigable river the town prospered.<<
Suggest
->Situated on a main north south route with a navigable river, the town prospered.<-

>>Hertingfordbury<<
couldn't they have added more appendages to this name? Hertingfordburyhampshiredownstokeway?

>>Quite simply London dealt in every known commodity down the ages, as it still dose today. <<
*does*

Actually, I see that that last sentence occurs twice in quick succession - this first instance could be eliminated.

>>The county has a long history, at the time of the Roman Invasion it was part of the territory of the Atrebates.<<
I'd suggest two sentences
->The county has a long history. At the time of the Roman Invasion it was part of the territory of the Atrebates.<-

Excellent - I'll revisit this tonight and have a look at the maps

>>The southern counties, This area became the dominant force in southern Britain under King Alfred of Wessex.<<
Is "The Southern Counties" supposed to be a sub-header?

No it now reads >> The southern counties, this area became the dominant force in<<

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>>The year 900 AD, saw a new king Edward I the Elder 900 - 924 AD.<<
I'd suggest
->The year 900 AD saw a new king, Edward I the Elder, who reigned for another 24 years.<-

Ok done that

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>>His reign saw the establishment of new markets, charters were granted the counties of Berkshire, Buckinghamshire, Essex, Hertfordshire, Middlesex, Oxfordshire, and Surrey.<<
I'd suggest using a semi colon for the break
->His reign saw the establishment of new markets; charters were granted the counties of Berkshire, Buckinghamshire, Essex, Hertfordshire, Middlesex, Oxfordshire, and Surrey.<-

Ok done that

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>>Alfred also built a strong defensive system for the town, established a royal mint and granting the charter in 900. <<
*granted*

Ok done that

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>>The county has a long history and the oldest town Colchester with a founding date 10 AD, before the Romans<<
and *has* the oldest town, Colchester

Ok done that

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>>Situated on a main north south route and an a navigable river the town prospered.<<
Suggest
->Situated on a main north south route with a navigable river, the town prospered.<-

Ok done that

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>>Hertingfordbury<<
laugh couldn't they have added more appendages to this name? Hertingfordburyhampshiredownstokeway?

Not many more

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>>Quite simply London dealt in every known commodity down the ages, as it still dose today. <<
*does*

Ok done that

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Actually, I see that that last sentence occurs twice in quick succession - this first instance could be eliminated.

Ok done that

....................................
>>The county has a long history, at the time of the Roman Invasion it was part of the territory of the Atrebates.<<
I'd suggest two sentences
->The county has a long history. At the time of the Roman Invasion it was part of the territory of the Atrebates.<-

Ok done that

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Excellent read through thanks for your time I will look foreward to more comments