h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Is that bad all I know is they work, unlike some links I've seen. Theres a link I want, it should go to some info on the comic code authority but it always times out on me.

I just checked to find the article, its ' American superhero comic books'
the link to CCA doesn't seem to work.

I guess if I really want the link I'll have to look aroud more.

'Is that bad?'

er... well, you click on SpyVsSpy, and go to a page that doesn't mention it... and then click on whatever the other one was, and go to the same page as before!

Shirley that can't be what you had in mind?

found a couple CCA sites, I'll just put them here for later

<LINK HREF="http://ublib.buffalo.edu/libraries/projects/comics/cca.html

<LINK HREF="http://www.sideroad.com/comics/column12.html


I'll be pasting one of these

found a couple CCA sites, I'll just put them here for later I'll be pasting one of these forgot the end quotes

I just checked those links dont work like I thought
I'm glad you brought this to my attention. they seemed to work ok from the site I got them from. I wonder what is wrong.

All the links except McCarthy will need to be redone.

back to the drawing board

looks like I have some browsing to do, but first I need to get some sleep.
It's 4am here and I'm tired.

Nighty night, and remember, if you must jerk... gently does it!

I've been witing for someone to say something like that
Now I need to do some browsing for links that act like I want them to.

This looks like a job for Super Jerk, up, up, and awayyyy

I got all the links fixed and tested them to be sure
and it only took 3 hours

Yay!

I'm going to be busy tomorrow, but will come back here again on Sunday with more comments, okay?


Mikey

No problem

By the way, I passed your idea of mentoring writers onto Shea the Sarcastic, she was the first person to welcome me here. I think she'll be able to give it a push in the right direction.

Okay, here's today's comments.

I think the entry is looking better. I think you could go ahead and submit it to Peer Review, but prepared for the fact that people there are probably going to have quite a few comments on:

1) grammar, and
2) how the information is organized

I think both of these have improved quite a bit, but they still have a ways to go. The organization has actually improved drastically -- I think at this point the main problem is that the headers you have aren't incredibly informative for the reader. I gave some suggestions in an earlier post about how to improve the headers -- you certainly don't have to go with that, but try to take into account that the 2 main goals of headers are to:

1) break up the information visually for the reader, and to
2) give the reader a concise idea of what information each section will contain

As far as grammar goes, I'm wondering how we can best help you with this. If you have Microsoft Word at home, you can copy the entry and paste it into Word, and run the Spelling/Grammar check -- it's far from perfect, but it does do a good job of picking up run-on sentences, which are the biggest issue here.

If you want to go ahead and submit this to Peer Review, though, I'll support you in that. I'd just suggest that when you do, you include a link to this Writing Workshop thread so that people can see what has happened already so far.


Mikey

Ok, i'll try the word program. and submit the results.

Umm... I cant locate Word, I might not even have it

any other programs you can suggest?

What program do you use on your computer for word processing?

Some common ones are:

Microsoft Word
Microsoft Works
Corel Word Perfect
whatever the Apple one is (I have it, I but I use MS Word on my Mac, so I don't know the name of this -- it might be Appleworks or something like that)

Any of those look familiar?

Not all word processing programs are set up to check grammar when they do spelling, though -- I know MS Word does, but I'm not sure about the others.

Imma sent it to a friend here at hootoo, she'll run it through Word and send it back

Sounds like a plan! Let us know when you want us to come take another look!


Mikey