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Cyzaki

I've just finished subediting this entry at A1150462 - any comments before I send it back?

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And Introducing... A Leg

Good stuff, thanx!smiley - ok

Just a couple of minor points:

The First Battle of St Albans:

P2: Margaret meanwhile had been driven by popular hostility to leave London for Coventry with Prince Edward, and Henry was later able to join them, thus effectively *moved* the Royal court.

I think 'moved' should be 'moving'.

P3: The government was now in stasis, with disorder rising - a French raid was even able to burn *to* town of Sandwich.

'To' should be 'The'.

Both of those could well have been my fault, and the other bit definitely is. The stars mark bits that need adding:

The Last of Lancaster:

P5: Meanwhile, Lord Montagu*, Warwick's brother,* was sent north to collect Scottish envoys to take to York. In late April, 1464, *at Hedgeley Moor* in the extreme north of England, he was attacked by forces under the traitors Percy and Somerset.

And that's it. Cheers!smiley - cheers


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Cyzaki

I'll sort those bits and send it back. I'm doing your 'second war of the roses' one too, but I've not started on that yet! I'll say something in that one's peer review thread when I've got going with it.

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