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Titania (gone for lunch) Started conversation Sep 26, 2005
The paragraph starting with 'We ambled round the coastal path...':
>>where seagulls on nearby rocks surveyed our picnic with with beady-eyed hunger.>>
One 'with' too many.
Same paragraph:
>>dashing down to the waters edge>>
water's
Same thing in the next paragraph (water's)
In the paragraph starting with 'At that point'
>>embarassment>> should be 'embarrassment'
In the paragraph starting with 'Joy leaned over the side' there's a full stop missing in the last sentence of that paragraph.
Question: throughout the entry, it says 'St. Marys'. Is that correct, or should it be St. Mary's?
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Titania (gone for lunch) Posted Sep 26, 2005
Oh, and do you want feedback posted here, or at the entry in question?
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U168592 Posted Sep 26, 2005
Here is fine. The Entry has been re-edited, thank you for pointing out the grammar and punctuation. 
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