h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

There are a few amendments you need to make

"Sacked from the Band" errors I can see are:-

amaz(e)ment = missed 'e'
shrug(g)ed = missed 'g'
when ever = whenever (there is no gap)
coinsdence = coincidence
theater = theatre (English spelling)

>>go (to) their awards<< = missed word

memeber = member
speach = speech


"Going Clean for the First Time"

Mitchigan = Michigan

>>and flea was happy<< = Flea (missed capital letter)


relaspe (transposed) = relapse


"Flea comments..."

councelor = counsellor
An(o)thony = error
rehe(a)rsal = missed 'a'
inconvientinent = inconvenient
omin(o)us = missed 'o'


It's looking good Cal, goodluck with it.

ok all done

Looking good

You do use "Anthony" a lot... in some cases you could just substitute "he" - it will make it easier to read, I think.

A few other things I noticed:

'Get up an Jump' -> 'Get up and Jump'
relaspe -> relapse
Song -> song ('Under the Bridge') [I always find it vaguely amusing whenever I hear the All Saints cover version of this, but I digress...]
There wasn't any electric to the house -> There wasn't any electricity supply to the house
over-dose -> overdose
36th Birthday Party in November -> 36th birthday party in November 1998
The Red Hot Chili Peppers have just released a new album entitled 'Stadium Arcadium' -> The Red Hot Chili Peppers have since released three new albums, the most recent being 'Stadium Arcadium'

(It is three - I just checked - 'By the Way', 'Live in Hyde Park' and 'Stadium Arcadium', although there's also the "Greatest Hits" album in 2003 and remastered versions of "Mother's Milk" and "The Uplift Mofo Part Plan" in that time period as well... but I guess we're getting away from Anthony and onto the band too much now ... sorry!)

I think album titles go in italics in h2g2 house-style, if I remember rightly...

all done

*gives the thread a bump*

Hello all,

I think there's a lot of good stuff here, but I think on balance the balance between his drug addiction and relationships and other parts of his life are a bit uneven. I know this isn't an Entry on the band, and that addiction has had a big impact, but being a musician is an integral part of his life and it'd be great if this could be reflected a bit more. Currently there's a big leap from them winning a Best LA Band award to fame. We don't know at which stage of his career these things were happening, or about the success that's going on as a backdrop to these problems. We also get the impression that his band were clean and disapproving of his activity, but then Hillel dies, and I think that needs a bit of foreshadowing.

But keep going! It is all interesting stuff.

Natalie

Nat

I've not mentioned anywhere that the band were disaproving, that just a perception you've made from reading the entry, all I've said is they had to let him go because his drug addition was affecting his ability to perform and get to rehersals, and that a little later on I mentioned that flea was worried anthony would wind up dead.

That aside I will do my best to achive your requirements, is there anything you would rather be taken out?

Hello Cal,

Yeah, you're right! I suppose that since he was dropped from the band I did perceive that, so it was a bit of a surprise to find out that Hillel had died from an overdose.

Although I know he has written extensively about his problems in his autobiography, an Entry in an encyclopedia that is entitled 'Anthony Kiedis' doesn't serve the same purpose and should focus more heavily on his music than on his encounters with drugs. I think it's best to write this imagining that people reading it know nothing about his many achievements and want to find out who he is - and so the drugs and relationships stuff needs to be pared down and supplemented with that sort of info.

Natalie

I'll rewrite it

stick with it Cal - as you know I like the idea of an entry on one of my favourite chappies, but I would prefer less focus on the drugs.

ok started rewriting this and now I'm wondering if I should split it into two entries as it's getting very looooooooooooog

Cal -

I'll get a look at this week sometime (kids are back to school tomorrow so things should get back to what passes for normal round her)

I of the opinion that we don't have to worry about length - it's the quality that counts.



Mr. Kedis deffo needs to get in the guide.

thanks

You're welcome - you also sound like you need a and some and

thanks