h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

It seems that KJ is gong to be offline for a while

Hows this going KiltedJedi?

Researcher PSG

Have been away from PC for a while, will try and update very soon

Fair enough, haven't been near the PC that much myself

Researcher PSG

Ok some updates have been done, et me know what you think.


Also spotted some fan fiction out there about the prequels writtin long before the gruesome twosome got to it that looks like a good read

http://www.seablogger.com/library/elixir/intro.htm

KJ

Reread the bit about the BG for grammar. It reads a little odd in sections. I'll spare you the details, but please pay attention once sentences get 4-5 commas in them, as they tend to run on, not a lot, but you get the idea, unless I need to explain it further, which I would be happy to do .

Not to be rude, but the summaries of Heretics and Chapter House read like the back jacket of the books.

Anyway, I really like the restructuring. The entry reads easier because of the improved organisation. I still feel that there a re a few small bit that could do with some tightening and improvement but I think the areas I mentioned above are the only sticking spots.

Excellent entry!

I have one little request: could somebody that does not know Dune read this and see if it makes sense. It makes terrific sense to me, but I know lots of this stuff. . .

Friar

ps. I'll post this request on the scouts forum and see if anybody bites.

I haven't read them

To be honest, some things are used before they're defined, which is confusing. A lot of things just aren't defined...

The new intro which gives the plot summary of Dune is better than the previous way the entry started.

Other problems: you should not reveal that the geriatric spice is created by the sand worms, as this is something which is only supposed to be revealed about half way through the book. Don't spoil the surprise.

You put a link to another entry, but the other entry is not in the edited guide, so this link will be removed when this entry is subedited.

Friar
To be quite honest I was getting to the point of 'finish the damn thing' by the time I got to the synopsis of heretics and Chapter. They weren't lifted from the cover (maybe I have found a new jobe role )

Will look at the grammar etc

And thanks, that is probably the kind of peer I need most on this Friar (no offence to your excellent feedback). I feel that I know these books very well, but I am sure I have probably lost some of the people who have never read the books somewhere in the bowels of the article. A Dune virgin is what's needed

Jodan,

Some of the things aren't defined here because they are defined in another article, albeit it is a bit brief. I didn't want to get bogged down in definitions. However the point has been taken, and so do you think that adding a glossary (I feel I have used enough footnotes and it would help get rid of some) at the end would make any difference, with some sort of disclaimer that specific terms will be defined there?

A glossary would help. Usually I hate them, but here you have more information than can reasonably go into footnotes.


Friar

I don't know how relevant this is, but I remember reading somewhere that at least the first book was written while he was in Seattle, working our local Post Intelligencer newspaper.


Mikey

Where're we at with this entry? I'd like to recommend it if its through.

Friar, wearing his scouts hat

Oh the green porkpie hat that sits atop our scout owl heads?

http://www.bbc.co.uk/skins/brunel/images/badges/big/scout.gif

Sometimes I've totally lost track of when my moves are due. . .

but I think they're due soon, and I'd like to toss this entry in!

Friar

You know we have a calendar on the scouts group

oh my yes there is!

TY!

Friar

Your Guide Entry has just been picked from Peer Review by one of our Scouts, and is now heading off into the Editorial Process, which ends with publication in the Edited Guide. We've therefore moved this Review Conversation out of Peer Review and to the entry itself.

If you'd like to know what happens now, check out the page on 'What Happens after your Entry has been Recommended?' at EditedGuide-Process. We hope this explains everything.

Thanks for contributing to the Edited Guide!

Congratulations!

Thanks, I'm a bit surprised that it got picked though

Congrats!

I'm the scout who picked it. I hope you were through. I realize that you hadn;t fully said "DONE!" yet, but I simply couldn't wait. . .I really like this work. Great job!

Friar