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A53808780 - Update -Michael Jackson - Singer/Songwriter
Gnomon - time to move on Posted Sep 25, 2009
Done that now. There's wasn't actually a lot. It just worries me when I see that there is a problem in the first sentence, because that's the first place most people look and nobody had seen it, which means that not many people have looked at it.
I did the following changes:
a singer and dancer who teased his fans with tantalising tunes while remaining at arms length never giving too much of his personal life away and his death open to conspiracy theories
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a singer and dancer who teased his fans with tantalising tunes while remaining at arms length, never giving too much of his personal life away and leaving his death open to conspiracy theories
During his lifetime over 100 million copies of his six solo albums have been sold worldwide -->
During his lifetime over 100 million copies of his six solo albums were sold worldwide
during The Jacksons' years --> during The Jacksons years
the Wizard of Oz --> The Wizard of Oz
The case was later dropped in return for a sum of money.
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The case was later settled out of court.
he was found not guilty. Despite being found not guilty it was clear -->
he was found not guilty. Despite this, it was clear
There's still one issue, though. The first courtcase was settled out of court, but the article implies that the jury had found him not guilty. These two are contradictory.
A53808780 - Update -Michael Jackson - Singer/Songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Sep 25, 2009
The first courtcase was settled out of court and the case was dropped. It was the second courtcase where they found him not guilty, I think
A53808780 - Update -Michael Jackson - Singer/Songwriter
Not-so-bald-eagle Posted Sep 25, 2009
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I'm not a fan, so I won't make any comments subject but just on one on the corrections you're going to make, ie,
The Jacksons' years --> The Jacksons years
Wouldn't it be clearer to say The Jackson Five years?
*goes away mumbling and grumbling about Jackson being the greatest pop singer of the 2Oth century, 'star' mebbe but singer...*
A53808780 - Update -Michael Jackson - Singer/Songwriter
Gnomon - time to move on Posted Sep 25, 2009
The Entry states that just after the first court case he married Presley and this was a vindication of the fact that the jury had found him not guilty.
A53808780 - Update -Michael Jackson - Singer/Songwriter
Gnomon - time to move on Posted Sep 25, 2009
The group operated original as The Jackson Five and later as The Jacksons.
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