A Conversation for Waste Water Treatment

Some comments

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Kheldar (Don't hate the media, Become the media)

Hi there...
As I promised before, I will try to stay tuned to the follow-ups. I'm sorry that it took me a while, but my time is pretty limited atm smiley - winkeye
I think I won't go into the actual text of the article, since my knowledge of the subject is definately not sufficient enough to provide sensible comments. I must admit..quite a few things went completely over my head.

Anyway...as for the comment...I would use either more carriage returns, or more empty lines between the paragraphs in your different topics. Some of the pieces you wrote are in one big piece of text, with a CR here and there, while others use a lot of empty lines to divide the arguments/statements. That makes it a bit tricky to read. Personally I would go with the empty lines. It reads a lot easier, the reader can get a much better overview of what you're trying to tell him/her. Of course, the decision is yours, but I would definately use the same way of layout in all the topics you're covering smiley - smiley

You describe "the sequence of typical treatments" in the article...I don't know if there are any other treatments? If so...can it be a good idea to tell a bit about those as well? Of course...this might be a question that's completely ou of context, but it was one of the first things that came to mind when I read the article smiley - smiley

In the first paragraph, you describe two steps...the ones regarding the collection and combing...after that you start a few new paragraphs, and in the last one you end of with "Finally". It's a bit confusing (at least to me) to understand whether or not those first to steps are just for the first phase, or if you continue the counting during the following phases.

I hope that made any sense...

Catch you later, Kheldar smiley - smiley

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